Dark Lordess

A small sigh escaped him; bring the attention of the other man. bringing Her mouth had been painted red and curled in an amused smile. Her eyes, however, were a ...

When she saw it was nothing but a paper hats he sank to the floor. When she saw it was nothing but a paper hat, she sank to the floor. ...

What if the kingdom is being invaded/attacked and the King, like Rasi said, is too arrogant to get help, so the people are pretty much doomed. The mages could be ...

What if the kingdom is being invaded/attacked and the King, like Rasi said, is too arrogant to get help, so the people are pretty much doomed. The mages could be ...

"People should [s]do[/s] help one another out of kindness," she said. One of them roared laughter but stopped abruptly when he noticed Maviance and Jyslan approaching. I think One of ...

Seyla stumbled through the trees, her right hand cradled against her. A bloody rag served as a bandage. She slumped against a tree. Pain. It dulled her senses and clouded ...

I agree with you. This is my favorite so far. :D The passage from the book is very good. Very mysterious. :P Her mouth moved in one last sentence, but ...

Sounds good to me Jules. :D Oh, Rasi says thats okay too.

Goldie, were building off what we had just changing it a bit, not starting over. :D Who's going to start it?

Very Good. :D But they have never stopped looking for a way home. I thought this was a great way to end the prologue. Moments later Gatter was already wrestling ...

I agree with Jules. That way, it won't be a completely different storyline. We can kind of adapt it from the old one.

"You left behind your leeches," Arnie shouted, "So I caught them and brought them back to you!" Thinking fast Larry reached into his pocket and pulled out a...

Okay... how weird is this? I was listening to Avril Lavigne's Hey You like TWO minutes before I saw this! (That's why I decided to read it actually) :P I ...

I think you should continue this, but i agree with bubblewrapped. I also think you should have written a bit more. I haven't read enough to judge this yet.

Your an amazing writer! :D Strick, we need to talk." Markus motioned to Strick while, and nodded at Creiha. I think you forgot something here. I didn't find the dialogue ...